Mythical Creature

What's wrong with Mr Paterson's writing.

I like pancakes.  My mum makes pancakes on Sundays, she is good at making them.

My brother Shaun is a dab hand on the bbq. All Summer long, we like to have bbqs every night, steak, sausages and meat patties, we eat a lot.

Sometimes I get to have a go on the bbq too, but my mum thinks  I am a bit dangerous.

My favourite things to do are: play soccer with my friends from nextdoor Mickey and Jimmy,  I ride my bike and have water fights, I usually win.

WALT: We had to fix anything that is wrong with the writing.

Flowchart

This is my flowchart of my school day, we had to make a flowchart and a Venn Diagram.

My speech 2016

This is my speech for 2016, it was about Minecraft.

What I have learnt about the Holy Spirit

This is what I have learnt about the Holy Spirit this term.

My Mihi

Writing

One stormy day, a girl named Chandler was walking around a broken park.  She saw a someone walking towards her, Chandler got scared but then the person said “Hi, my name is Rowling”, I thought she was going to talk in a deep voice because she wore a very dark coat which was very long.  I ran away as fast as I could because I didn’t know that girl, she acted very mysterious.  My mum called me for dinner and she said “How was your day, Chandler?”  I said “It was fine I guess, I also saw someone in the broken park in Llama street, her name was Rowling she said”  My mum and dad said “Well you really need some friends to play with you so you don’t always stay in the house”.  So the next day I went to the broken park again to see the girl.  I found her, she said “ Why did you run away from me,  I’m don’t bite but I do have a tantrum when I am angry”.  So I ran I away from her before she got angry🙋.  When I turned back she was running towards me in a angry way, so I grabbed my phone and dialed ‘911’ and said “Help me! there’s a maniac chasing for just running away from her, ahhh, please” just then the cops came out of nowhere and put the girl in a orphan house to fix her brain… So I went home told my mum and dad everything and they said “Well no friends then”

THE END!