The Hurting Flames.
I woke up intensely, breathing heavily as if I ran a marathon. Running out my room into my parents. Blocked. As if the fire was guarding the room.
I yelled and yelled. Then, I realized they had already disappeared into the furious flames. The whole house was filled with my terrorizing screams.
Shocking how my loud neighbors didn’t take any notice. I… I couldn’t breathe, I inhaled the smoke. It felt like I was going to cough out my lungs, my throat couldn’t take it. Those screams I let out were as powerful, now the smoke is taking over them. Of course, I gave up, all I know is that I was going to die. A warm tear rolled down my eye, then came a storm of them.
The nearest puddle was filled with my tears. My burning skin, the pain I was feeling wasn’t stopping. My two legs that were made for me wouldn’t work, they were weak. I used all the power I had left and dragged myself out the boiling house over to the walking path. I was noticed by a woman driving by, she saved my life, the life that could have been taken away.
She took me immediately to the hospital, she was speeding. We then came to a stop, being pulled over by the police.
The woman wasn’t fined, she was allowed to take me to the hospital.
I could tell she didn’t care if she was speeding, all she had in mind was saving me.
Already a week in the hospital… I was diagnosed with lung cancer.
The smoke had damaged my lungs a lot how the fire damaged my family.
Do you still remember the woman who saved me?
She had stayed with me, she entwined her warm hands with my cold ones. My loving relatives did not take action, they never visited me once.
The woman’s family came, they wished me to get well soon. The smell of the flowers they gave me filled the whole room.
The doctor came in with news… The news was heartbreaking. Even for the woman, she cried.
It tore me apart… I got told… I wasn’t going to live for long.
Within a week, I will disappear and leave this planet. He gave me two options… Cut me off now or wait.
I chose to give up now. It’s not worth to wait, I’m going to die anyway.
I was shaking to sleep.
Everything was dark.
Then came a beam of light, nearly blinding my eyes. I heard cheering, clapping and singing.
“Where am I?” I thought.
The light was everywhere… I soon realized I was in the kingdom where nothing ends. Still…. Something didn’t feel right.
Then...
Darkness covered my eyes.
I didn’t know what happened.
Where did the cheering go?
What is happening…?
THE END
Written by: Ysabel Buenaventura
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