WALT: Show not tell. We are learning to write to imply. We are showing what we are feeling, not tell.
What feeling could you infer from my piece of writing?
I found it hard to use different describing words to describe the feeling without telling. I did well on describing how I felt before going on stage to do something. Next time I could shorten the writing.
My heart drops to my stomach. Quick deep breaths. Bright lights lit the stage up showing the graceful dancer. There my body stood. Completely frozen and unsettled. Sweat was already making its way down the side of my face. It felt like a shower but only in sweat. My face heated up, my cheeks turned a deep dark red. The music suddenly stopped. My heart felt like it stopped. I didn’t blink for a minute. I could feel vomit coming up but I held it back. Everything and everyone went silent… I realised I was supposed to be on! Tears formed and slid down my boiling cheeks. It felt like swimming in a pool full of anxiety, fear and many other thoughts swimming along with me. My eyelids were heavy as my heart beat calmed. My eyes closed… The chatter from the audience dug into me; hearing different whispers every second. Mouths moving constantly. Not one or two made me feel better, they were getting frustrated..
